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Post by ORANGE on Jun 20, 2010 14:58:36 GMT -5
Alright, unfortunately you need to change a lot of your stuff here. So when you fix all these things up, we’ll be happy to accept you.
One, First off spell check is your best friend, you have a couple of spelling mistakes in your bio.
Two, Since he is from Ziel, your character isn’t going to know anything about the pokémon world and the humans. Therefore, he doesn’t know who the champions are so you better take that out. Another thing is that you’ve given him a lot of ultra balls and a master ball, no, get rid of those. If he’s a new trainer he isn’t going to have those at all.
Three, We’d like it if you gave some information on your Totodile. For example, what gender is it, does it have a nickname? How did your character catch it and what is the Totodiles personality like? It doesn’t have to be a lot of words, we’d just like to see some information on it.
Four, Some of your personality traits, likes & dislikes and weaknesses does not make sense. For one you class him as a dangerous, deadly and evil like person yet he doesn’t like chaos and panic? That doesn’t really make sense to me and Lance. If you have an evil person like that, surely they would like the panic and chaos they create in their wake. ‘Serpent’ Isn’t a personality trait and ‘Blood Riot’ what does that even mean, that he’s violent? Versatile pokemon users isn’t a weakness. Likes to talk in riddles isn’t a skill. Take some time and think about these sections of the bio and what you should put in.
Five, We suggest you change his origin and name if you keep this character, or change the face claim. This is because some of the info on your character is the same as your face claim, so yes, please change that because we dont want you to break one of our rules.
Six, No super natural powers, considering you gave him 'clairvoyant' which you spelled wrong so I think this is what you meant. Ziens dont have super abilities, the only thing that seperates them from humans is that they have unique hair colours and odd inhumane traits.
Seven, Finally, I don’t understand what you mean by ‘evil snake king’ sorry, we’re not accepting snake kings, or anything like that. Try a different site if you want to be a royal serpent.
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